Aankhein
Posted by shiwuz on April 25, 2008
Jhalakte hai un aankho mein maikhaane kai baar
Chhalakte hai un aankho se paimaane kai hazaar
Panapte hai un aankho mein aashiq beqarar
Khilte hai unhe dekh kar ye gulshan ye gul-e-gulzar
Daras ko un aankho k taras jaati hoon mein
Karti rehti hoon har dum buss un aankho ka intezar
Ab to na soch baaki hai na samajh baaki hai mujhme
Kar jo nahi sakti mein un aankho ka ikhtiyaar
Hothon par sajte rehte hai aksar kuch tanha tanha naghme
Un aankho k bina ab aata hai na chein aur na hi karaar
Aawaam mein zaya karti hoon mein soone se ye lamhe
Un aankho k bina nindiya bhi aane se karti hai inkaar
Kabhie meri khabar na mile to kehna unko, wo padhle zara akhbaar
Wo jo na mile to nikla hoga kahin meri maut ka bhi ishtihaar
Shiwani 
yaake said
I can almost feel those eyes!! 🙂
Good work, keep it up! But don’t scare me like the way you have through the last line of this poem!! I won’t read the papers!! 😀
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yaake said
You’ve been tagged!
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shiwuz said
@ Yaake,
No worries!! And I am working on my assignment, give me some time…
——————————————————-Tagged?!
yaake said
Yeah!!!
Go to this post:
http://mirrorcracked.wordpress.com/2008/04/26/tagged/
Answer all the questions in your own way and tag five other people… 😀
It’s like a chain… 😀
viral affection said
Didnt really lke this work, da! Looks like an obvious effort made in fitting that list of rhyming words you must have had on paper… gives an essence of some forceful imbursement done to extend an (supposedly) interesting thought of your mind, which (unfortunately) resulted into a not-so-interesting production of prose… quite amateur… because it was from you, that is why the amateur stuff cant be appreciated… sorry honey.. for the harsh usage of words… but this shouldn’t dismay your expedition of an ascending panache in writing… Yes please ?
…pEace!
shiwuz said
@ Yaake…
Got it!
@ Viral Affection…
I am utterly surprised… not because you did not like it, but its crazy how you made out that this is an amateur’s work!! this infact is one of the first poetries that i wrote… so indeed i was (and still am) an amateur, a very natal state!! surprised at how you could recognize the difference, surprised at ur capacity to distinguish the age of an artist’s relation to his/her art academy!!
infact, I am the happiest to read your comment, happier than I would be if you dint use the assuming-ly ‘harsh’ words…
Yes definitely!!
Rajesh said
A beautiful lovely poem. The last lines in particular are the best.
shiwuz said
@ Rajesh,
Long time Dad, thanks a lot!