Ehsaas na tha…
Posted by shiwuz on April 22, 2008
Kaagaz par phir shabdo ki kuch lakirein hum khinch diye
Wo lakirein kiski k liye yaadon ki sarhad ban jayegi ye ehsaas na tha…
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Mehsus kiya hai ik aisa bhi rishta
Jo naam se aage nikal gaya
Malum pada jab logo ko
Duniya ne usko kuchal diya
Wo rishta dheere dheere se duniya se ojhal hone lagaa
Dil mein to magar wo tabse hi naasur k jaise palne lagaa
Hamara ghaav unhe dard na de so ghaav hum andar hi dabaa liye
Wo ghaav hi phir hamare jeene ki wajah ban jaayega, ye ehsaas na tha…
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Wo ghaav jo dabaa k rakkha tha
Hum marham uska bana liye
Phir halke halke malkar usko
Chaddar k taley hum chhupa liye
Wo marham dhire dhire se, chaddar me aise ghulne lagaa
Wo ghaav to akkhir roojh gaya, chaddar ka rang kuch udne lagaa
Gaur se usko dekha to phir, khud hi se hum mukar liye
Ek ghaav mitane wala marham, chaddar par daag sa ban jaayega ye ehsaas na tha…
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Dil ka bojh halka karne hum kalam toh utha diye
Wahi kalam ka tez rukh kisike dil par katari ban jayega ye ehsaas na tha
Shiwani 
yaake said
I really don’t want you to feel responsible… It happens sometimes, and I probably need more time to settle down in my mind…
This one is so brilliantly composed, I wonder now whether you’re a Phd in Hindi..!! 😀
I’ve been meaning to ask you about these sketches, the one with “Tangled” and this one too… Do you draw them yourself? They’re so appropriate…
I wish I could write well in Hindi… Teach me, na… please? 😀
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shiwuz said
Not a PhD in Hindi either (like i said, PhD in nothing but messing things up! 🙂 ) But personally this was a very quick composition and it is indeed not one of my favorites… It was what came to my mind after reading YOUR analysis of ‘yaad…’
The sketches… I wish there was some place I could put the courtesy title, infact i’ve been thinking to add it end the end of each text group…
they are not my original, i just try to find something off of the net that may suit or describe an imaginable visual of my text…
Wil ladd the sources where I can…
If you teach me to write beautiful short stories, then may be I can think about the hindi poems…
Cheers!!…
yaake said
It’s a deal! It’d be my pleasure to teach you to write beautiful short stories… 🙂
Tell me how we can go about this mutual learning experience… Email, face-to-face, telephone..? You pick the medium…
I was actually pestering a friend of mine to help me compose a poem in Hindi for you… It’s kinda crude and not as wordy as your poems… amateurish work… lol… interested in reading it? 🙂
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Rajesh said
Beautiful thoughts of mind put in to the words. Its awesome dear. How did you get this much in your ltl mind!
Anyways, keep it up. U were also otherwise a good writer, I know…..
God Bless
shiwuz said
@ yaake:
Ofcourse i would love to read it, guess this would be the first piece of art ‘custom made’ for me… pleasure will be all mine…
about teaching, i m not sure if i would prove to be a good teacher… my friends say i tend to get too philosophical during conversations… and often they take anti-sleeping pills! 😀
@ Rajesh:
Pa, my mind is not as little as u think… hehehe… 😉 … it only looked smaller when it was about studies!!
yaake said
I’ll email it to you tonight… Please read it and lemme know what you feel… And about the teaching thing, well, I guess you’re my favorite kinda teacher! 😀
Don’t worry, I think we can work out a mutually helpful strategy… Ar art for an art… 🙂
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shiwuz said
@ Yaake,
Sure e-mail it to me, will be good to read that! like i said earlier, it will be first (and probably the last) one written for me… exciting ehh! 🙂
yaake said
Hmmm… Definitely won’t be the last!!! Again, it depends on whether you like it or not! lol… What if you throw it in my face and say “It’s crap!” Then i’ll be demoralized and will never write poems again… then, it’ll probably be the last…. 😀
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